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Over all this is pretty poor.
I'll cover the positives first and then stuff you can improve after.

Firstly You've got good coverage for the surface type, concrete can be quite spongey and suck up a lot of paint before you start to get solid colour, especially with low quality paint.

Secondly, the outline consistency is better than in some of your previous stuff, but it's quite hard to tell where it ends and where the rest of the crap on the wall begins.

Lastly the shine highlights on the first "L" and the shoulder of the "O" are very thin and well formed.


Now the stuff you can improve, and theres a lot of it.

Firstly I have to ask if that's a crown above your tag? If so, cut it out. It makes you look like a tool.
Not a very constructive comment, I know. But it's true.

Secondly, I don't know whether it was the surface you were painting on, the paint you're using, or your can-work, but there are drips all over the place, and not in places that make it look intentional, and done for effect. Just looks sloppy.

Finally The glare/ asterisk shaped flair on the letters are fat and clunky, it would look better without them, unless you can figure out how to execute them properly, ditch em.

You could also stand to use a white highlight around the entire piece to make it pop away from the wall, and start to think about what other details you can add to the outline, and the fill, what patterns, and what connections you can play with to create something more interesting and original.

Love is something worth spreading, even cackhandedly.
Peace dude, keep writing, keep learning.
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ImVAS Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thanks for the critique bro.
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soragaki Feb 17, 2013  Student Digital Artist
welcome :)
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